Interesting language in poem:
tomatoes planted
in broken concrete backyard plots in spring
This reads like filler:
when Havana's tropicals and flamingo heat
migrated toward our own city summer,
for Jersey beans loving 9th Street's market sun
Could you be more vague?:
where women frowned and men sold glory,
Interesting interchange of alliteration (s and g) to suggest the "sog":
and August's soggy long summer skies
But that good vibration is lost with:
boomed
and purpled before rain fell on our heads
like an end of time,
"Like an end of time"? Really? (How is that not any worse than "rain fell on our heads/ like armageddon"?)
Now first hints of the listing to list begin:
for artichoke points and plums,
for watermelon hissing back at this blade [More of this please!]
that once turned its other cheek to day-old
brick-oven bread, your fine uneven edges
faintly silvered once I diamond-steel
their grinded, used-up years of rust and gray …
[Yawn.]
Be ready for my needs, to do the work you know,
to answer hunger at odd times like these,
around midnight, or six hours later, the cantaloupe
As if that last line weren't enough, and now the full pointless list (more filler):
or breakfast crust, then lunchtime's cold cuts,
dinner's cutlets, scunions, beets, you knives
and silver dollars and unlikely crystal flutes …
Please, tell us what else you took from the house. We're dying to know. As it might be more interesting than this list of foodstuffs.
the precious few things,
[Argh! Denied!]
except for their lives,
that I saved from the house of the dead,
This phase would be laughable were it not in a published poem. Note to beginning workshoppers: never show up with a poem with any permutation of the phrase "house of the dead" in it and not expect to be giggled at.
where they argued, flashed you like batons
at their enemy, themselves, before or after food,
be ready for whatever waits in half-dark now,
for telltale chance, or fatal cherishing.
So I get that the knives represent a mixed inheritance: "precious things" that are also weapons. Symbolic of family strife, yada yada. But how is that any different from anything else inherited? As symbols the knives are rather...dull.
P.S. To anyone impressed that this is all a single sentence, that is easy to do when loading it with list filler like turkey stuffing to fill in the hole in its innards. For a truly impressive single sentence, reread "The Silken Tent" by Robert Frost (a rhymed sonnet in a single sentence).