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Read this at a library poetry reading the other night.
by martingreene

CLEARING OUT OLD BIKES

He knew no one would use the bikes again.

But the Rudge three speed, with Sturmey-Archer

gears, was still a good bike, the one his parents

had bought him when he was fifteen. Nobody,

bike stores, thrift stores, wanted them. They

didn’t want the baby furniture either, the cherry

crib his sons had all slept in, or the sturdy high chair.

It was good that he could sneak over to the

clothing-only drop box, with the baby furniture,

and see that it was taken within hours. Someone

would use it, his sons’ furniture.

But the bikes, his English racer, a smaller racer

his three boys had ridden, and their little tricycles.

Those he had to put at the curb, by his mailbox.

He was told, put them out the night before,

people come sometimes, and take them for their

own kids. You say they are not broken? No.

It had snowed overnight, and in the morning,

they stood together, untouched, and

when the big-mouth trash truck came, he was

out there, and nodded yes, as they grabbed each

bike, and threw them, one by one into the back,

where the machine would turn and grind them up.

He nodded thanks, managed a smile,

and watched the truck go down the street.

One handlebar stuck out, like an arm reaching

out of a grave. He went back to his work, clearing

the driveway of the predicted snow.

© 2005 martingreene

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I guess I posted this here four years ago.

Re: Read this at a library poetry reading the other night.
by islandtime
Yes, Martin, I've seen this poem before, but it bears revisiting. It's very poignant. Thanks for posting it. And did you get a good response to it when you read it the other night?
Re: Read this at a library poetry reading the other night.
by Soccerfreak

I like a lot about this, probably everything but the actual poem. What I mean is that the creative process involved is clearly on target, the sentiment is poignant, there is something fulfilling in the ending, and there are a number of phrases and lines worthy of inclusion in the next revision. I really like the image of the handlebars sticking our from within the maws of the garbage truck.

It is evocative.

The idea, I guess, is what I really enjoy here. The poem itself, I think, needs more economy (and who am I to talk?).

The subject matter is excellent, the narrative flows clearly, the point is well-taken, and as indicated above, I think it ends in a splendid manner.

A good job, and perhaps on the verge of being a memorable poem.

I would suggest, martin, that you give this one a lot more of your attention.

I hope it went over well with your poetry reading folks. It has merit, at least from my admittedly limited perspective.

Take care,

Joe

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