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dissolving. almost drowns but not quite
by richard

This mood manages to keep afloat, but just barely.

While it does set a mood of aquatic tranquility it

also floats into choppy waters

"on his back in the female receptive position"

is an awkward image and in the last few lines

the poet drifts over his head as he frantically treads water.

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