Agreed on the plums, MaryAnn. Maybe we should just get rid of the fruit altogether! "flimsy resistance, the split." Or something. My question would be whether you need the erotic cliches like "split of soft fruit" (and "things on our hands") to make the point that "Hey, we were just kids! We weren't thinking about language and poetry. Cliches were just fine with us!" But that seems a strained justification ...