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Re: how david sedaris got to the little big horn
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Hey, Onetokeunder,

Sytax, my friend, syntax!

I know a thing or two about being onetokeover and your run-on sentences and overly parenthetical eliptix have me now truly wishing I could get a bowl load of whatever you are experiencing!

Try recasting a few of those sentences into readabilities.

I know there are some good points in there somewhere, but try not making all of them at once.

Yes, my syntax s---s, as well sometimes but if what I think you were trying to say could be said more directly, we could have a chance to discuss it. As it stands, I find it hard to follow.

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